Everyone wears a mask. What we see of people on the surface is so rarely what’s ticking underneath. And, in Cortland Hunt’s case, what he’s hiding might just be more than Ian Tanner is prepared for.
Breaks is the story of two young adults coming to terms with who they were, who they are and who they’ll become.
It’s a love story…but a little broken.
Emma & Malin
Emma Vieceli is a freelance comicker, with titles including Vampire Academy, Avalon Chronicles, My Little Pony & Young Avengers under her art belt. She co-writes Breaks and provides art. Emma's Twitter
Malin Ryden is a prose writer most known in the field of horror and queer fiction in her native Sweden. Her work is regularly featured in Eskapix magazine. Breaks is her first foray into writing for comics. Malin's Twitter
Emma is suffering from RSI, so I am on commenting comment duty this week. Probably good to make me get off my introvert arse and interact with people. You're all awesome, and I read all your comments every week, just so you know :)
okay.. first the biggest apology, and then the G bomb.. nice (probably not even planned) technique, Cort. XD. who, except the dumbest homophobic jerk haters maybe, would get angry after such a confession?
eehh.. not sure i got the acronym.. so.. get well? ^^
Everything about this page, from the smooth to ragged to smooth word bubbles, to the snakeskin ragehate that fades upon Cort's shaky exhalation, to the shift in both their eyes (Harvey finally looking up, Cort then looking down) --
You two are masterful in your depiction of mood; I would want to put in so much more WORDS, I would try to break it down into milliseconds of facial expression changes, but Malin, you say SO MUCH without making it a 4hr dialogue. HOW?? How many words of narration or dialogue have we seen so far? You have made it so easy to fall in love with these damaged folks, and I'm betting we're not even 15K words in -- maybe 10, if that?
Emma, you capture the single instants in which any reader can recognize, can know what those moments of confession felt like, from at least one side or the other.
The your side-by-side of the boys in that moment shows how much they are SO alike, how much vulnerability they have right there, together. Those unsmiling lips, the tightness around their eyes.
I keep coming back to panel 1. This whole prison trip has been traumatic for Cort. He knows full well that he should be in prison and he fears it (look at his perception of going through the metal detector; it's like the gates of Hell). But now, he's seeing his alternative life first hand in Cail and seeing what it can do to a man (I'm thinking of the scars on Cails' wrists). And, at a gut level, he realises what Harvey has done for him and wants to make amends.
His unplanned coming out stems from that, but I also think Cails' comment about learning to move on plays into it as well. Cort has been keeping secrets for years and it wears on him. He takes this chance to drop one so there's one lie he no longer has to keep straight, if you'll pardon the pun.
Finally, there is that background that looks like a 3 point perspective drawing of a tall structure of bars. It doesn't look like the kitchen floor but it looks remarkably like the grid under the metal detector and the unpanelled background two pages ago where Cort is looking back at Cail, but also the prison. That one background sets the context for the whole page. For me, it's the prison that he has avoided and the prison of secrets that he's built for himself and he starts to open in panel 6.
Second of all, I have Emma to thank for helping me to cut down. I write novels. I am wordy as hell. If it was up to me there would be 4 hour dialogs because rambling is what I do.
Emma... taught me that I couldn't do that. There's a limit to speech bubbles, to the rhythm of a page. I need to cut down, prune away. It's more poetry than prose. Still, there are often more words in the dialog in the scripts I send to her, but she just snips and cuts and keeps the best things. She's got such a good sense of rhythm, which is also evident in the panelwork!
@yaoiioay: I think it was the last thing Cortland expected to do away... It's weird in the way that Cortland is both the most closed off and the most open, while Ian looks like he's wearing his heart on his sleeve, but can't face the important things.